Pretty Crazy

I actually liked this. The language is too strong for my taste, but it was interesting, so I read it. Well, I don't have any grammar comments I'd like to ...

I like it. Sometimes a princess story can be boring, but you gave it some mystery. Kudos to you for that. :) I man stood next to her, holding a ...

Ooh this is good! This is a very creative Red Riding Hood twist. :P I don't really have anything else to say for a long, fancy review. But, hey, any ...

This is getting better. Thank you for explaining your characters further and not just getting on with the story. Well, actually, you did both here. You had some action and ...

This is fascinating. But your titles kind of a throw-off. I admit I almost didn't click on it when I saw it. But once I got into it, it was ...

Harder than you think, I went to a high school were there was 7,000 students. Another "were" mistake. It should be "where". :) I finished getting ready; brushing my teeth, ...

I liked it. For some reason, I'm fascinated by stories with kidnapping. I'd like to know more about this story. Hopefully you'll explain some more later on. :) I think ...

Alright . . . that was intense. Probably the most intense chapter yet. It's amazing how you show Ash developing into a fighter. But he might be becoming a little ...

Hello, welcome to the YWS! For some reason I liked this. I don't know why. Usually I'm more fussy when it comes to action (this didn't have that much) but ...

I thought it was beautiful. I had to focus hard to half-understand what you were saying, but I think I got the picture. Your description was actually not that bad. ...

Hello. This is really good so far. I'm just going to go through some spelling mistakes first: They wer then able to remotely trigger a release, were she was ignoring ...

Hello! :) Very interesting start. But there isn't very much description. What do they look like? What is going on? And how does he feel? You don't have to answer ...

Haha! I knew it! This sounded like the kind of story that involved something like super powers! Uh, didn't spot any grammar errors. Just try to slow the pace a ...

This is interesting. Some people would be turned off at the mention of global warning, but I agree it's a very real possibility. I can't wait to see what happens ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! :elephant: Good introduction. But it's very short . . . you might be able to hook more readers if you gave them a glimpse of what's ...